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Re: need a site review-Sales copy
Posted By: Imogene Bell In Response To: need a site review-Sales copy *LINK* (John Murtha)
Date: Sunday, 15 December 2002, at 1:25 a.m.
Hi John,
I agree with Rodney, the type is too light. Older eyes, especially, need larger or darker type. Try using black rather than silver on the grey background. Where you have the light blue, try a darker shade. Bold the item numbers. On Item #1 the sentence ending with 'own' seems unfinished, 'own what?'. 'EXISTING NETREPRENEURS'-- how about 'successful' for the last word where the period was left off, intentionally I assume.
RETIREES could be something about meeting new people; keep brain active; feel useful without needing a lot of 'brawn'; add extra income to the Social Security check.
How about making the font size for 'It's about time', etc. a little larger and then use the font size you were using there for the current smaller type. Don't overkill the word 'killer'.!
Your price is good, but there will be a lot of persons that really need your course that will not be able to pay that much at one time. How about a monthly pay plan of $14.59 per month with a "Contract" for one year?
Since you said it is a first draft I know you will be proofreading before finalizing it, but aside from the suggestions it looks good.
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